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April love

Raining dew

upon the rose

of my eyes

rainbow dreams

nestled within

pink an’ purple wishes

labyrinth

the walls of my mind…

 
Fingers an’ tides of sighs

entwined

in earnest pray

lavender hours...

summer scent

throngs the heart

of the green earth red

her soul

gushed along

his scarlet beams

in gold an’ silver play…

 

Swinging arcs

of blossoming boughs

fill her misty

silhouettes

in new spring madness...

an’ upon the grass’

green youthful charms

we bloom in dewy freshness

like fancy flowers

that, winged lovers

dropped from heavens…

 

An’ in cool cloud contentment

here I clasp the stars...

as I brush the velvet

of my lips

against your cheek

in mellow moon musical

an’ hear the seas

rise within,

the black desert of your heart…

 

The music of your breath

at my ear flowers

honing bee, bronze

rustle of silken breezes

song of the soft rain…

but a sudden storm

of flowing fire

blue butterflies breathe

(of your eyes)

a crimson contagion

into mine

lightning of love…

 

An’ as fire kisses fire

in cool dead drunkenness

deathless moments

showers, slanting arrows

of dusk desires

an’ here the forest wind

steals some fire

from furnaces

of our sighs

an’ spreads upon

the emerald isles…

 

Dew stars faintly

strewn; sparkling jewels

on my face

diamond gold

you turn them all

an’ fragile pearls drift away...


As soul searches soul

mountains move…

pains of tonight

fears of tomorrow

snaking sands

of ancient impatience

nights of ever-expanding

waits…

fragile falling flowers

ebb, distancing cadences.

 

An’ so I treasure within

my autumn heart

sun of these April hours

these only treasures

I do have

an’ that I must only have;


Rains of your April love…

melting snow sorrows

an’ all an’ everything

that but with you…I find

the endless depths,

the silence seas

an’ as

the song of every wave
in numb joy I drink...

rising an’ receding

for the moistened moon

of my eyes…

 

 

— MeanderS, May 19, 2008

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

Beautifully expressed,

but please, please, please put in some stanza breaks, it would make it so much more readable. And what is the huge white space at the end? I will give you more constructive feedback when the stanza breaks are in, let me know, cheers, Jess
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MeanderS

18 years ago

Hi

Thanku so much..yeah n i jus did it..hope this one 's better....o god..! this is damn long!..anyways. fren, i m looking forward f ur valuable comments..thanku wishes.
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Calliope

18 years ago

I thought

This was a beautiful expression of love. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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dsaranti

18 years ago

Thank you

Thank you for a wonderful, sweet, romantic poem. Well done!!! Your friend Dimitri
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purplemoondoll

18 years ago

I read this a little earlier

I read this a little earlier and Jess's comments and thought to wait to see if you would take his suggestions on board. I am really pleased you did because your revisions have brought the whole poem to life. Brilliant imagary - you 'kept me there' all the way. Excellent. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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MeanderS

18 years ago

thanku Kaz…so very much

thanku Kaz...so very much for your kind words..n thanku f waitin so paitiently..smiles> wishes all the best
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pinksheep

18 years ago

I have

now eventually read this poem -i give it 10 out of 5- I like the way Jess describes this poem that it has power and meaning,i really like that-This poem will be read by many, and the more and more they read this poem the more they will like it , it shall never wane, with more reading it will become even more powerful-Regards-It has impact-
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MeanderS

18 years ago

ma dearest pinksheep! so now u know why the'impact'.zzzzzzzzzz

O' m so happy..dat u were here....O' god 10/5?? that's too generous a teacher!!! anyways..thanks for ur never waning inspiration.an' O' how can I frget the most important thing...this poem started all in ma mind..after I read ur'Past love'..it deeply touched me an' especially the word 'entwined'..i dunno how much justice i hav dun to my grt source of inspiration an' the poem..but thanku dear! al the best wishes...
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pinksheep

18 years ago

Meanders

Entwined is a good word i know, however i took 3 words'our bodies entwined' from a poem by a Lady on this site-I am wondering if to change it to our limbs entwined? i quite like the word body though it has some force-Regards

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