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MEL

Life....

A warm winter's day, I sit and dream away
the past, the present...the future
what will become of my life now?
Who will share it with me?
I need to discover a new path
where will my destiny lead me?
A truck slows down in the distance
a horn sounds from afar,
Everyone seems to be going somewhere
to their destination.
Here I sit..stationary...motionless..without purpose
My cat looks frustrated, I wonder...
could she be feeling like me
or maybe she's just hungry.
The sun disappears behind a fluffy white cloud
every now and then I feel the warmth of the sun.
I could sleep here...
soothing hum of traffic
Sunshine makes me warm inside
Close my eyes....relax....Life!
— MEL, May 23, 2008

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Country/Region: USA - Florida

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Mel

"could sleep here… soothing hum of traffic Sunshine makes me warm inside Close my eyes….relax….Life!" - I read an alternative meaning into this... before you were sitting and fretting on life. And then a realisation that not much can be done, so why worry? Enjoy the small things in life (warm sun) and take one minute at a time. Nice write. ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"
wolfycat

wolfycat

18 years ago

I like when...

I like when one writes about what's inside and does not mind sharing their heart and soul with the world... confessional poetry... It can be good or bad...life is not always fun, but it's real! In sharing yourself...you could help someone else to identify, and heal. Wolfy.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Mel...

We all tend to feel we are just spinning our wheels..going nowhere fast.. but I love the way you said it and I could almost feel that warm sunshine make me sleepy.. good writing.. Richard
M

MEL

18 years ago

Thankyou

Mel Inwood It's so good to recieve compliments like that! It is my aim to touch people with my writing...you just never know what effect someone will have from it xx Mel

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