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Two Short Poems

Inner flowering The eyes of revelation
Fire of purification
Harmoniser of discordance
Perfecter of imperfection  Secret Subterranean Whisperer Our prison bars are forged
In the furnace of our ignorance
Yet, from this point of realisation
Begins the road to emancipation
— leonard daranjo, May 26, 2008

Critiques

RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Two Short Poems

These sound more like the beginnings of ideas than completed poems. Perhaps it is your style. If you like short, concise poetry, I would suggest looking into writing Tanka or Nonet forms. You may find them enjoyable, and they pack a strong message in few words. Best, Ronda

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