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She saved the day...

 

They were in love,

deeply in love.

 

They had dinner out,

it went well for some time

but there was an argument.

It went on and on

throughout the dinner.

It was sad because

this was their first real argument.

They reached a partial solution in the end

and they parted amicably.

The next day at the office

he was deeply depressed

desperate, hopeless…

He sent her a long message

describing his deep despair

and his desire to drink.

He scheduled an appointment

with his doctor

because he had to remain sober.

It was a matter of health for him.

The hours passed

but there was no message from her,

no support, no care, no helping hand.

They talked on the phone briefly

and she expressed her concern.

 

As he was leaving the office

and contemplating

whether to buy liquor

a message suddenly arrived:

it was from her..

  “I hope you are feeling better and please don’t drink”  

Her timing was ideal:

he drove straight home

didn’t drink

and felt better already

 

What a difference

a message can make.

  
— dsaranti, May 29, 2008

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

She saved the day

Smiles:) Barbara What about the days he won't be able to talk to her. A little argument, seems he needs a grip. Needs some breaks between stanzas. I would not want to be her.

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