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She saved the day...
They were in love,
deeply in love.
They had dinner out,
it went well for some time
but there was an argument.
It went on and on
throughout the dinner.
It was sad because
this was their first real argument.
They reached a partial solution in the end
and they parted amicably.
The next day at the office
he was deeply depressed
desperate, hopeless…
He sent her a long message
describing his deep despair
and his desire to drink.
He scheduled an appointment
with his doctor
because he had to remain sober.
It was a matter of health for him.
The hours passed
but there was no message from her,
no support, no care, no helping hand.
They talked on the phone briefly
and she expressed her concern.
As he was leaving the office
and contemplating
whether to buy liquor
a message suddenly arrived:
it was from her..
“I hope you are feeling better and please don’t drink”Her timing was ideal:
he drove straight home
didn’t drink
and felt better already
What a difference
a message can make.
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Barbara Writes
18 years ago
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