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leonard daranjo
May 31, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

God's Flame

Pencilling its way
Across an indigo sky,
Spider web lacerations,
Paint the earth
Incandescent
— leonard daranjo, May 31, 2008
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Sean

18 years ago

Looking out my window I wish

Looking out my window I wish I had your 'God's' flame, not the pail and dreary, opaque haze, that shrouds the earth grey.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

God's Flame

Take no offence here- words were beautiful, but I would add to this, or change it to Haiku, Just my meager opinion~

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