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my eye? or nose? (senryu)

I smell a skunk ... but
see a possum; does my eye---
or nose?---deceive me?
— barbsdad2003, May 31, 2008

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themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Chuck...

perhaps your possum has been doused by a skunk...lol smiling ... Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years ago

a skunk in ‘possums

a skunk in 'possums clothing? lol. i do, however, detect something malodorous this way cometh;-) loved it!!! Anna
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rider68

18 years ago

Very Nice

The banter has been covered, I enjoyed the read, Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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poewriter58

18 years ago

Chuck

well done Haiku amusing, either way I would keep it away from Buster Chrys
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Senryu

Smiles:) Barbara I would drop the semicolon and add a comma. I also would drop the dashes and remove the question mark from behind nose making it one sentence. Just some suggestions Title with question marks takes away I think. Is the theme about your eye or nose? or the deceptiveness described in this piece. Great theme.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Chuck

I agree - I think the possum got into a tassle with the skunk. At least it isn't Buster that's going around stinkin'! Cute write. ~Jess K. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Political Correctness is a doctrine, fostered by a delusional, illogical, liberal minority and rabidly promoted by an unscrupulous mainstream media, which holds forth the proposition that it is entirely possible to pick up a turd by the clean end."
Mark

Mark

18 years ago

LMAO, Chuck

Depends on how close to that possum ya are lol Personally I would rather se a skunk as they are a bit more cute and I would not want to be that close to the possom. It all boils down to where my nose would rather be :) Mark
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Chuck

sorry not to comment sooner, catching up on my reading and laughed my Azz off! great job

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