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Blend of a Rainbow

A beauty unmatchedRadiant glowShe walks, long legsLights go outWhispers grow The splendor she possesses like a weapon unleashedCaptures the souls of men – leaves women down on their kneesSmile brightly shinning, makes you smile just to witnessDark eyes piercing like venom, lethal, deadly, so viciousThin and long she commands the attention of the roomLike a divine being she ascends to the light of the moon Beauty a feature desired and cravedBut cleverness, cunningness, poise also deserve praiseHer mind a treasure, just as her lightHer laugh her patience her bravery and might Cut her in halfPoke a hole through the centerWhat will leak out - the colors of the rainbowAll blended together
— stavroula, Jun 02, 2008

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Stavroula

What a unique piece! There is not much more I can say here. The last stanza is superb. Best, Ronda
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years ago

whom ever this Lady is

A job well done I love the line about the Eyes for real men fear to look into them for fear of what they might see I have never seen the lethal deadly eyes until the ending of the relationships though piercing with venom lovely write Donnie/ Sinbad the colors all blended together am not sure this what you intended for you seem to be praising until the hint of the blackness was this your intent? for when you blend all of the colors together you Get Picth Black Sneaky or a over view Or just me clever though it might be Got me guessing please tell
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Liamb

18 years ago

Inspired

This is all I could think of on reading this piece. Truly an amazing image of passionate allure. Just one small hiccup: 2nd stanza, line 3; Shinning? (sp - shining) Regards Liam
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stavroula

18 years ago

what i meant by the blending

what i meant by the blending of all the colors is not only is her beauty(one color) amazing about her but the other aspects of her being, she is a perfect women, blending all the amazing virtues in life, every color there is in the rainbow together.
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Jacob

18 years ago

Incredible

This invokes such a powerfull image, it is the perfect women, Venus. The divine imagery makes me want to devote my life to finding her. Thanks for a great poem that has inspired and touched me. Jacob

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