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Nancy and Elaine...
Her name was Nancy.
She was enchanting
as a crisp, beautiful sunset.
She had the natural beauty
of a fresh, spring, crimson rose.
She had sparkling,
piercing blue eyes,
wonderful as the clear blue sea.
She was quick,
she was smart
she was successful.
I was madly in love with her
my heart ached for her
I was crazy for her.
One sad dayshe ended it all
without a single
word of explanation.
The world collapsed on me.
I cried, I wept, I sobbed.
My heart ached
I just kept crying.
Everything around reminded me of her
and there was one constant
piercing thought drilling my mind:
“I will never forget her,
I will always keep thinking of her,
I will always, always be in love with her”.
In a new chapter in my life
I met Elaine.
We had work to do together
and we met ever so often.
She was a lot prettier than Nancy
she was beauty defined
she was a lot smarter
she was brilliant
to make it short
she was a Goddess on earth.
But my mind was elsewhere.
I saw her and kept thinking of Nancy.
I even called her Nancy once or twice.
She was openly flirting with me,
she was showing me
her gentle, sensitive romantic soul,
she was making passes at me
and all I could think was:
“I will always be in love with Nancy”.
Well it took a lot of time,
it took a lot of effort on her side
and things began to change.
It was slow, very slow
but it finally happened.
I slowly began to fall in love
with her and realize that
not only was she prettier and smarter than Nancy
but that she was a wonderful person
with beautiful feelings
a wonderful romantic inner world.
She was kind, responsive, tender
and so very caring.
I still can’t believe it
but I’m fully in love with Elaine
and Nancy is a thing of the past
a simple nothing.
All my friends used to tell me of Nancy:
“Just let go”.
I thought that was ridiculous, stupid,
impossible, incredible.
But it happened,
it’s for real,
it’s true…
Critiques
weirdelf
18 years ago
I'm voting 5
dsaranti
18 years ago
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weirdelf
18 years ago
I believe you
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