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Nonet - The Choice is Ours

Lord Buddha came on to this earth andReached out to all humanityHe told us that we have toExtinguish desireIf we wanted toBe happy onThis earth andAttainPeace
— leonard daranjo, Jun 27, 2008

Critiques

infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Leonard!

This is awesome! The structure was perfect, and you were able to squash in a nice message into that little space! Well done. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
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leonard daranjo

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Jess

Thank you very very much indeed. When communication takes place - there is nothing like it. Cheeers ... Leonard
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DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

What of the desire,

to be happy? kinda catch 22, eh? Nice write, Mark

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