Toilet Symphony

Shhh, tinkle, tinkleGerrr, Rahh, Ssss , pop, pop, pop, POW!Plop, Plop, SPLASH! Ahhh! Flush

— Michael Landau, Jul 08, 2008

Critiques

goatman

17 years 11 months ago

Onamatopoeia is a brilliant thing...

Nuff said.

Mark

17 years 11 months ago

rofl

lmfao ^4 just for ballsiness

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Sounds like you have TWO crecendoes (sp?) with the caps there... +4 for getting a much needed laugh out of me. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~"Save the trees, wipe your ass with an owl..." ~"The grass may be greener on the other side, but it still needs to be mowed..."

cricket

17 years 11 months ago

ROFL

What more could be said lol.. thanks for the laugh I needed it .. +4,, It had to said lol..BrownEyesBlue

Michael Landau

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you everyone!

Thank you everyone for your comments! I'm really glad you liked it! Actually, this is one of the best responses to one of my poems I've ever received! Who knows, maybe in the future I will be inspired again and write another movement. Sincerely, Michael

poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

Michael

This brought a LAUGH Now I have seen it all lol I wouldn't touch a word of it and that is just my opinion Chrys

Michael Landau

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Chrys

I urinated, defecated and wrote a poem all at the same time. I don't know if I will be employable, but I do have skills! Is that what they call multitasking? Michael

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Toilet Symphony

Smiles:) Barbara Why I hate public restroom,LOL Great title and imagery.

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

love this Michael

poetry needs to be excremental as well as cerebral and philosophical "No matter how much you jiggle, dance or you prance, the last few drops always end in your pants" cheers, Jess

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