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Smiles:) Barbara I see the image of dilemma here, but the meaning allude me could you shed some light on my inability to interpret this relate the title so I can see it I apologize for being so lost

but I'll still make a couple of suggestions. I'd take out "once" in line 2. There are too many beats for me in line 2 and "once" is unnecessary with "never". I really like the metaphor of urgency as a mesh in line 5, then you have another nice metaphor in line 6. So, I'd like to see one in line 4 because, in comparison, that line seems a little flat. Maybe, a drill of words? The end is where I struggle. I'm unsure whether or not it's good to be bound. Perphaps that's what you were trying to convey? Thanks for writing.

Great to see something up from you again. There is a symbolism to this piece that gives it a sense of intrigue; an enigma for the mind to solve. Even before your explanation, there was a sense of familiarity to the words. I agree with Arrow regarding "once" and "never" - "once" isn't necessary. The line reads better without it and the poem flows more smoothly. Best, ~ Ronda

I don't know what to say. I am in love with this. "you wear the day in transfer i’ve never seen you bound once" Great beginning. I love poetry that introduces its own reality. once again I am in love with this.