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BIRDSONG

I was not asleep
  yet not awake

In that blissful state
     I was granted a rare glimpse

Into the very real world 
    Of make believe

Fairies with gossamer wings
    Were dancing upon the golden rays

Of the early morning sunshine
    Birds soaring up above

Were singing, and as each perfect note
     Escaped their throats

It would turn into a beautiful flower
    And slowly float its way down

Into a net of gold and silver threads
    That glistened with the early morning dew

I was not awake
     yet not asleep
   

— Linda Moses, Aug 01, 2008

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Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

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Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Wondermous

Fabuful my friend. This was a treat to the eyes and the tongue. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Respectfully, Rett: "On life; Ah such a wondrous thing, beauty and love to behold and experience! On death; I can wait to see..." Rett 2008.
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poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

Linda

and in that blissfull state drop the and into the very real world of make believe try into the realistic world of make believe Linda this has such beautiful imagery very nicely done indeed I was able to picture it well done Chrys
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Linda...

what a beautiful picture you've written down... the only thing I see wrong with it is, it seems to be a run-on sentence, one thought.. the capitols at the beginnings are not needed, but yet... it didn't hurt it in the slightest... relaxing read... Richard
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

Capitols

Thank you, Richard. I wondered if the caps at start of each sentence were needed. This is the stuff I need. You and Chrys are great
yenti

yenti

17 years 10 months ago

birdsong

Lovely piece, and as a spiritualist married to an international medium, your glimpse twix sleep and wake could be .....
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

True

Yes it is. All except the fairies. The notes turning into flowers and the net below are true
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poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

linda

beautiful now! nice work Chrys
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Linda...

like Chrys, I believe this is a work of art... and I thank you for posting it... Richard
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

nice write

Smiles:) Barbara I really like the part that says, Not sleep, yet not awake, nice image I had been in twilight sleep many times.
yenti

yenti

17 years 10 months ago

The Fairies

We have a world, and our children have a world, and in thier world there are fairies, and other things, that even we would long to be part of if only we hadn't lost that simplistic love and imagination. Keep the sleep at bay but let the awake drift with your thoughts then see a child in yourself, Yours Ian.T (Yenti)
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Okay, you did it now

You took a very pretty poem and you totally made it even better and more beautiful. I hope you realize that now you have gone and made me give you a 5 star on it. You should be ashamed...NOT! Respectfully, Rett: "On life; Ah such a wondrous thing, beauty and love to behold and experience! On death; I can wait to see..." Rett 2008.

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