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ODE TO MY SAVIOR


When I die, I will hear my Savior say
     What have you done with your life
     Can you tell me, today
So I will tell Him that I rode a horse
      at a gallop, and nearly fell off   
      I rode a horse at a walk and
      I nearly fell off
I laughed and I cried
Danced and ran like the wind
I sat on a swing and swung
     so high, with my toes tried
     to touch the sky
Tried my best to be good, but often
     did not know where to begin
But oh, you know 
    sometimes I was bad and I did sin
I sang, but always off key
     I even sang a solo in the Baptist Church
I was a mother, and loved
     my children so
I was a nurse and took care of your sick
     and by their death bed I would often sit
I painted portraits and trees
     planted tomatoes, flowers and peas
Had many dogs and cats
     and even remember all of their names
I was a Girl Scout
     and sold many cookies
But I suspect, dear Lord that
    what I am telling you is all useless stuff
And maybe what I have done
     is not enough
But I do know that I have always
     loved you
And even better than that
     I know that you have always loved me
    
    

— Linda Moses, Aug 11, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

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Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Very nice Linda

We don't always do our best, we try and fail. Our tempers flare, we say things we shouldn't, but we try. I suppose if I stand before Him I will have to say. I tried Lord, I tried and your will be done. Nice thought provoking write. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

ODE

Thank you Rett. As long as we love Jesus, we will be just fine
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

this was good

I was drawn by your title. I like it. There wasn't much rhythm, or pattern, but it is freeform. I think the theme is one discussed somewhere in the world everyday. I liked it. Dana
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Let me be clear, when I said

Let me be clear, when I said there was no rhythm or pattern, I mean visually. When you look at the poem there is no real pattern. You have to read it to see it. It is as I said freeform. Hope this helps. Dana
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

Something is happening to me on this site.

Normally I would have slammed or ignored this poem. However good, compassionate poets like you are teaching me compassion and tolerance. I could never commit to just one religion or belief system which doesn't make others wrong. cheers, Jess
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

Hey, Jess

Thank you, I like it when you comment on any of my stuff. You are a good guy. I sometimes think my writing isn't deep enough
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

Excuse my arrogance

but if it is deep enough to make me truly re-evaluate my beliefs and attitudes, it is deep enough. You have a gift I lack, using simple language to say things profound. cheers, Jess
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Linda...

I've been around Christians my whole life.. you are the kind I am not opposed to.. you actually believe and to me that is an admirable trait.. so many only say they do and steadfast cut me down for not believing... I can't say you or anyone here has changed my views but I can say that I appreciate your thoughts as I believe they come directly from your heart, and your poem shows it.. well said! My Mom still says to me, Jesus loves you Richard... and I thank her every time because she truly believes and only wants the best for me.. she knows how I feel and it doesn't sway her into thinking I'm some kind of monster which for some down here in the south that is exactly what they see when they hear I am an un- believer... sorry for ranting.. enjoyed your poem Linda.. Richard
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

Ode

Thank you, Richard. You can rant anytime you want
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Linda

Straight from the heart, and very beautiful. 'twill be all right in the end. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "Just 'cause you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one....."
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Jess

Thank you. Did you enjoy your vacation?
T

threecrows-lg

17 years 9 months ago

Re: Ode To My Savior

Morning Linda, What Richard said is what i would say as well. One's convictions are paramount; the core of what we are. Not so much the trecherous in-laws. Hey? ;-\ Take care friend. lg
SG

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Simple, but straightforward

This combination t=is what makes this poem truly specail and hearfelt regarding Christians, like myself. Nice poem.
E

easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very good write

Simple,down to earth and yet communicating its message.Thank you for this write.

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