True LOVE forever...

They embraced, they kissed,they hugged, they cuddled...
They looked into the beautiful sunsetholding hands tightlythey had hopes, they had dreams.
They smelt the beautiful red rose
and their hearts pounded together.
They walked on the sunny beach
and they simply loved each other...They loved each other so muchthey cared so deeply for each otherwith real deep trustgenuine belief.They admired each other so candidlybelieving truly each other was perfect... But most of alltheir greatest dream of all was that they would always be togetherthat nothing would separate them except death.They were absolutely dedicated to each othercaring, caring, caring for each otherIt all started when in a purely business letterElaine interjected the phrase:"Take a look at the wonderful moon tonight"Dimitri respondedand one thing led to another.And now they were really holding handslooking at the beautiful August moon.They were dreaming, dreaming, dreaming.And they were writing poems,beautiful romantic poemsto each otheralmost every day...They were in lovein love forever...

— dsaranti, Aug 18, 2008

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Critiques

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

Beautiful poem

of eternal love. My only suggestions (if I may be so bold) would be to change "no one would separate.." to "nothing would separate..." and I would change one of the "genuine/genuinely lines so genuine isn't used twice so close together. But I do love this poem... Tom

dsaranti

17 years 9 months ago

Thank U so much. I made the

Thank U so much. I made the changes suggested and I hope for the best!!! Your friend Dimitri

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

It is beautiful. Thank you.

It is beautiful. Thank you. Love is eternal, isn't it? ~A

easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very beautiful

I liked the way you cameout,so natural and you told your story without any pretences.Thank you

pinksheep

17 years 9 months ago

Dimitri

I wish I could be as romantic as you, surely it is not all a bed of roses with you and your loved one, even in romantic courtship one has a quibble or two- I keep reading about Elaine, have you written a poem about one of your children, maybe you have Dimitri because I could be mis-reading-To write of others relationships that might be very hard and could take guesswork?What do you think Dimitri? and keep going, your mate pink with sincerest regards-

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