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A Tale of Hatred, The Spirit Son

Oh great spirit, Father of all
I speak to you now
heed my call.

Born of your discarded thoughts
your wasteful joy I do despise
I vow to be the alternative to your lies.

My father love, why?
why do you waste all of your time
on humanity, and their happiness?

"I hate those weak piles of flesh"

For every broken heart that you mend
I will enter the mind of a suicidal kid
and whisper "Do it."

and for every mother you console
I will convince two "you can't take this anymore"
and whisper, "do it!"

Churches fill up once a week
to kneel and pray to you I think
what fools they are, and you, King of fools.

One day of remorse, and six to stay the course
"I like my odds."

Tales are told of your love
a message better off left unspoken
'cause I am Hatred your spirit son...

I come to the lonely as an alcoholic drink
sometimes I lure kids as a catholic priest
I am the voice of reason when all reason is gone.

I am Hatred, the spirit son
kneel to your god and let's have some fun.











— DarkinAZ, Aug 21, 2008

Critiques

Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

AWESOME

Man o man, you said it all. Sometimes it is good to take the opposite view and express the antitheses of how you really feel. Absolutely awesome write sir! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Rett

Glad you understand the fact that this is my complete opposite. Glad you enjoyed. Your friend, Mark
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Anna...

Thanks my friend. Sincerely, Mark
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Mark

Your alter ego writes well. Especially liked the stanza where you would be the voice telling the suicidal to "do it" - pretty powerful. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "Just 'cause you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one....."
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Jess...

I am glad you read and enjoyed. Your friend, Mark
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Good write

I have seen a couple of your works and I appreciate the depth with which you write.Another very good one,alter ego on the high.Thank you
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Dmmit, this is the

fourth time I have read it and guess what? IT IS STILL GOOD! Respectfully, Rett: "If life is a bowl of cherries, why am I in the pits?" Erma Bombeck
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks bro...

So glad you like. Your friend, Mark
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Mark...

To believe in one... you must believe in the other... but even to an un-believer this was a great write... glad you shared this one... Richard
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

I am the most beautiful and beloved of god's angels

yet I questioned his bloodthirsty methods and he cast me down. I rejoice in it! No longer subject to his unworthy rules I make my own choices and, yes, I am completely accountable for my actions. I whisper "rejoice! feel no shame for who you are". I whisper "if this child is born in hatred let it not be born". I whisper "you are not born with original sin, you are born with your own choices to be beautiful and gracious". I whisper "thou shall not have dominion over the birds and the beasts, we all share this planet". I whisper a lot and shout sometimes. The most beautiful Angel has great wisdom and knowledge, as most Angels do. If you knew the bible as well as I do you might realise that God needed Lucifer as much as yin needs yang. cheers, Jess
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Jess...

Glad to see your comment here. I respect you and your opinions, they are always welcome my friend. Your friend, Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

thanks Mark

In utter lack of humility (mmm overtones of Lucifer again) I thought my reply was so eloquent I might make a poem of it! teehee respectfully, your friend, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

teehee

guess I only take opposite, offensive or controversial sides, not sides. When you know you're right you must be wrong. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Congrat Mark

Figured this one would make it. Jess, careful, I think I see some drool on your chin. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "If life is a bowl of cherries, why am I in the pits?" Erma Bombeck
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

that's not drool,

it is essence of pride and if I have fallen it is to a better place. Hate harps. Dig fire, brimstone and all the deadly sins. cheers, Jess
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Mark

WOW, [I keep saying that] My favorite: And whisper "do it", sent chills up my spine. You really know how to reel us in!
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Life90 E.A.S.

17 years 9 months ago

I agree!

Gosh i love this poem. Very inspiring! It speaks to me really, because this is what i have been fighting about for many years. I have tried to bring this same message across to many people and never succeeded, but you have in this very poem. Well done! LiFE90
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you all ...

I am glad so many enjoyed. Sincerely, Mark
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

sweet!

So glad to see this one in Spotlight. Another brilliant "Marky" poem. :~) ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "Just 'cause you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one....."
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

I knew I was good for something!

LMAO! Involuntary new nick name. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "I hope no one asks me to show them the ropes; I have no idea where they are. Maybe I can pull some strings and find out...." - George Carlin
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Mark

I probably shouldn't do this, but I have a question. If a hooker spot a terrorist, calls the cops on her cell and follows him until the police arrive, would you call her a tail of peace? Respectfully, Rett: "If life is a bowl of cherries, why am I in the pits?" Erma Bombeck
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

No,

I think I would call her an S.T.D. (Skanky - Terror - Diversion) Seriously, "Tail of Peace" that is a pretty good one my friend. Sincerely, Mark
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

rofl

Here's a bigger question: Would she DO the terrorist KNOWING he was a terrorist in an effort to buy time until the police showed up? STD....LMAO! Y'all are too much. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "I hope no one asks me to show them the ropes; I have no idea where they are. Maybe I can pull some strings and find out...." - George Carlin
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Still feels good

Even after my fourth read.You deserve the spotlight my friend.Thank you.
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sophie kant

17 years 9 months ago

awesome:)

5 stars. i would've been really scared of you if it wasn't for those last words. it really felt like you meant it. but maybe you did once, most of us did feel that way at least once. again, awesome:)
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

yes,

I did feel the notes at the bottom where necessary for those who do not know me. I am glad you read and thrilled you enjoyed. Thanks for your vote too! Sincerely, Mark
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blistered-pen

17 years 9 months ago

beautiful

just beautiful. you've left me speechless. in an awesome way. I come to the lonely as an alcoholic drink sometimes I lure kids as a catholic priest I am the voice of reason when all reason is gone. BEAUTIFUL! kudos Mark with admiration, Jori Riane Smith
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you very much!

I am glad you liked and I really appreciate your comment. Sincerely, Mark

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