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t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Aug 22, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

INFESTED SYSYEM

INFESTED SYSTEM Our struggle brought a new song for independenceCannibalistic war devoured the growing populationAnd the flowing sweat drained for our destructionWhat horrors were seen by warriors?In the battles for self determinationAnd those who denounced war
Upon blood of slain brothersWere denied the means of existenceThey queried the nature of thingsA nation was born drained of hopeNationalism sacrificed on the altarOf a degenerated system entwined with tribalism;And ethnicity propelled identity in restrained libertyWith kick-backs as pass-words at every doorCorruption and crookedness became the normAnd right-doing an aberrationBut this matter of freedomThese rights of oursTrampled uponSlipped out of our fingersThese fingers that would re-construct our system
— t. reflexion, Aug 22, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very good write

This is absolutely good and it encapsulates all that is happening to us as a nation from how we got it wrong at the begining to this present moment.Perhaps I appreciate it more because I'm also in this contraption of a country.Thank you.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Thank you easylife_2 for your comment. It is nice to hear from you. Best wishes.
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Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Good

I can relate in regards to living in a country with the same conditions. Love the stanza in the poem as well. Captures the essence of what's really wrong with this country. Good poem.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Appreciation

I appreciate your interest in my scribbles. Thank you very much. Don't tell me Mr. Green is from River State or Bayelsa? Best wishes.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

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Another awesome write sir. I have a friend in India that came over here for a couple of years. He was telling me you can't get anything done by any officials there without a bribe. Even getting your passport stamped requires money inside the passport or no stamp. I guess a lot of things are that way. Even here on a minor level. You be careful and be well my friend. Keep writing. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

I think most third world country is like this. There are so many people who have no income at all. There are many people whose income can not take care of the family, thus the tendency to extort and swindle from the weak. Best wishes.

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