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t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Aug 23, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

SEGREGATED RACES

SEGREGATED RACES Chains of slavery cast spells of brutality everywhereBringing along widespread killing in our landOur sons are sent forth for destructionMass massacre with black rite processionsAre the evil ends brought by past savagesWith religious custom of the heathensWhen our communities spin on the brinkThe abuses of power pose bare-faced challengeMust I alone weep in helplessness?For victims whose colors and races I so admireAnd for the conscience of those sufferingYet I cannot describe their pains in wordsI say the days of reckoning are comingWhen we shall raise monumentsWith wreaths for the wrongdoers;Humanity has a noble universal themeAnd must be purged of all impurities
— t. reflexion, Aug 23, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Wow!

Will you write a crappy poem already so I can critique it?! *laughs* I feel bad that there is so much suffering in your country. Was watching a documentary about Afghanistan (I know you're in Nigeria) about how horrible things are, and how poorly women are treated, etc, and it's just sickening. I hope conditions improve and that there can be peace. Touching write. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "I hope no one asks me to show them the ropes; I have no idea where they are. Maybe I can pull some strings and find out...." - George Carlin
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southern_voice15

17 years 9 months ago

Love is being stupid

Love is being stupid together. ~Paul Valery Nicely done. Well written and very powerful. There is a point behind this, which I find to be lacking in many writes, even in my own at times. Great job
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Thank you southern_voices15 for your encouragement and the comment. Best wishes.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Yes I will...

Infinite_Dwarf, I have a lots of crappy poems in my file, some of them can't come out good no matter how I try to polish them. I am afraid of what will happen when the down side of creativity sets in and I start putting them on stream. when those hard criticism come I will simply run for cover. (smiles) No, I will not run, I joined this site to improve on my poems and I am getting that already. Feel free to give me a helping hand. I need it. Sometime, it is good to detatch oneself from ones work in order to get a better view. My lecturer once said that a creative work has life of its own and should be appreciated as an entity seperate from the source. He then said, once a book is written, a poem or piece of art is created, the author is dead. Do you agree? In all, thank you very much for stopping by to read and for your comments. Cheers and best wishes.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

T.

I don't believe you ever wrote a crappy poem. I will have to think about what your lecturer said. I am not sure if I agree or not. It is one of those things like if a tree falls in the forest and there is no one to hear, does it make a sound. I have heard good arguments on both sides of that question. Although I do agree what we create takes on a life of it's own. Our sons are sent forth for destruction. So pitifully true.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you very much

Linda You've caught me already in a philosophical postulation on structuralism. Honestly, I am not sure how I can argue this out, but take a text whose author we know nothing of and try to appreciate it. You will agree with me that all the merits and demerits of that text end with the text. May be I can't put the arguement strong enough as my lecturer did. We were convinced then, but I am not sure how I can handle this now. Thank you very much my friend for always being on my side or should I say, on the side of my poems. My heart goes for you. Best wishes.
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rider68

17 years 9 months ago

Must I alone weep in helplessness?

Sadly there is so much truth in your words, to make matters worse, the west is conditioned by media backouts, unless it has a baring or a financial concern, or there is extreme famine, we are only fed topical concerns, Let's hope the day of justice comes soon, Loved your account, although painfully true, But true has a price as well, Take care.....and Very Best Regards, Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Peter Thank you for your comment and for weeping with me. Best wishes.
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 9 months ago

T.

This poem tears at my heart. I have meet some people recently from close to Kenya, and I have heard about their houses being set on fire with the people in them. This is pure evil. Some have escaped, but to be away from their country and they have had to deal with language barriers, isolation, loss of family. My heart goes out to you. I wish the wicked would flee. recently got together with a group from that country. I love the accent, the faith, and strength I have seen. And correct me if I am wrong, but the trouble they say is from people that have taken refuge in the country. terrible. We in the United States are very grateful for what we have. I am not rich, but I appreciate my freedom. sincerely, Patty
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Patty

Yes, are right some of the problems we have here are caused by us. Have you seen a people who seem to like suffering? That is what I think about the way we do things here. Thank you for the reading and the comment. Best wishes.
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very good write

This is so true,touching and down to earth,what more can I say ?Thank you
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

I have not read one crappy poem of yours on this site.

Jess K. was right, there is nothing to critique here. You have a voice like a lion with the gentleness of Gandhi. You bring more than awareness of your countries plight, you bring a form of poetry that reaches peoples souls. I am envious. I think it is your personal compassion combined with direct honesty that makes your poetry so great. Anyone un-affected needs immediate medical attention. Their heart has stopped. cheers, Jess
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Gandhi?

I am honoured to be associated with such a great personality like Gandhi, thank you. Honestly, I have some poems that don't seem to make sense now due to mother tongue influence and limited vocabulary, thank goodness, neopoet is helping and I am learning fast. Best wishes

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