9/11 Silent Tears

Silent tears fall in remembrance.

Sad today,
so many spirits taken,
in this awakening.

Disbelief still today,
this will not go away.

Time has flown,
We are, on our own.

Survivors left
feel guilty.
Why not me?

These haunting images.
Screams fade away.
Will always remain.

Faces of those
Lost in the clouds.
Silently, stand alone.

Others rush past,
in panic.
Disasters chases them.
Engulfs them.

The rescuers
become the ones to be
rescued.
But no one comes!

Lost souls,
ad mist the confusion.
Hero's arise,
out of the dust

All faces the same.
Just staring into space.
No one home!

All that was,
is now gone.

Ad mist the chaos
Silence comes.
An unearthly peace,
found by the few.

We look.
We see.
We do not comprehend
what lies before us.

Peace be with us, all.

— Electric Blue, Sep 11, 2008

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Critiques

W.C.Wampler

17 years 8 months ago

poem, 9/11

Elec, I wish I could allow myself to just 'stream of conciousness' some poetry. But when I try, I feel foolish because it jumps and drifts and repeats, and usually needs much editing to become solid. You just take a thought, or a picture, or a memory, and let fly with words and words and words,and let other people get what they can from it. Maybe some day I'll be able to let meself do that. Meanwhile, I struggle for words, phrases, rhymes, internal consistancy and flow of logic. Oh well, I can only do what I can do. I'm learning. wcw

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

9/11

Hi WCW Thank you for your comments. I have come to understand that other poets find a few words and really have to struggle putting the jigsaw together. It has to rhyme it has to be so many lines etc. I have never confined myself to this. You understand my way of poetry. It just flows until it is finished. I re read it a few times and may move a word or line.I very rarely edit my poems. But as i write the words,it is a moving image unfolding. (like watching a video) also it stays with me over and over. But by reading the way other's do their poetry i am learning constantly trying to improve. Thank you for you insight and help with word construction. electricblue

yenti

17 years 8 months ago

9/11

I wrote "Can We Really See" on this time, your silent tears, a lot of peoples silent tears, I think that we were really shaken by reality and that we can write so many ways of this time will bring more tears. Hadn't seen your piece until today, it was good and well written and with them all in thought. Somewhere I read that someone had gone there and it felt cold, I feel that with so many that were lost there, and in that their own spirit would have moved on, it would after their energy level at that place left, leave such a void that it could only feel cold. Thanks for your writing, Yours, Ian.T

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

9/11

Thank you my friend. I was in the USA at this time and could not believe evan now this really happened. I have been to Ground Zero and they are there. It should be made into a memorial garden for all those who cannot express themselves. But it can be a place for them to show their respect. Also to shed tears for those who cannot. This is so haunting my freinds. There is a presence there. Thank you for your comments Maggie Electricblue

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