Electric Blue

Sep 24, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Wine of Desire

Wine of desire
is in my veins.
But only the
desire of you,
can quench my thirst.
We are joined
together.
Through the labyrinth
of the circle of time.

One look into those
ocean blue eyes.
I was lost in love
before,
we had Evan
spoken a word.

The power of you is,
beyond this
universe.
You dog my soul
So deep,
into the
labyrinth
of my mind.

— Electric Blue, Sep 24, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

W.C.Wampler

17 years 8 months ago

EB, such compliments...

Electri,I'm sure this is meant to be an ode to someone special. But wait a minute, "dog my soul" ? I think you should search for a better word. Or, maybe not.wcw

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

wine of desire

Hi WCW You have great insight You dog my soul, Ha! I just love that line.......... What can i say when i write. i am inspired by others. electric blue

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

wine of desire

Hay WCW maybe you can view a few of my poems 9/11 sad tears fall Sillohettes Darkness of night. I would appreciate your comments regards Electric blue

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Wine of desire

Smiles:) Barbara i love the taste of sweet wine, hate champagne. so wine describe as love is great love the image here

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Maggie

Great opening stanza - very powerful. You're screen name is very familiar... did you by chance come over from poets.com?? Maybe that's where I know you from. Either way, welcome to Neo. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "Johnny was a chemist’s son, but Johnny is no more. What Johnny thought was H2O, was really H2SO4...."

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Wine of desire

Hi Jess I am still on Poets.com until a friend their introduced me to this site and of course i have recomended others here also. I have found many friends from the other site here. On Poets.com I used my real name Maggie Robertson Thank your for your wonderful comments. Enjoy my journey. I hope you get to read some of my other poems. I write about any subject but of course this one is self explanitary. always electricblue

purplemoondoll

17 years 8 months ago

The last verse is for me the

The last verse is for me the best. I have to admit that I am not the biggest fan of love poetry but this is enjoyable to read. I love the title and the opening verse - but felt maybe you could work on the middle verse a little - see what you think. Did you mean Evan or even? Take care Kaz x It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Wine of desire

Hi Kaz Yes there are some special times and i have to express them in different ways. I do love to do poems about nature but just love to paint pictures with words. maggie xx

Lonnie

17 years 6 months ago

Another winner, Maggie!

You certainly know your stuff! I believe I'm becoming quite a fan!

Electric Blue

17 years 6 months ago

Wine of Desire

Lonnie We all have moments that will stay forever as if it is just now of course it will always be now for me. electric blue

Dalton

16 years 6 months ago

The Wine of Desire

The Wine of Desire a poem on it's own as if uttered from the lips of Homer. I love the use of the labyrinth in poetry, it speaks so much without falling prey to unecassary verbiage, a labyrinth of streets, of dreams, of thoughts the mind. Thankyou for bringing this poem to my attention. Love Dalton.

Electric Blue

16 years 6 months ago

wine of desire

Dalton Thank you for looking on my poems Maybe you would like ot read Sea of Extasy and Electric Blue Mermaid and Secluded Grotto You touched my soul etc. I could go on and on. Enjoy my freind. always maggie

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