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leonard daranjo
Oct 06, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Shape of Your Life To Be

 it should always be remembered that 

life is not a strawberry field

choices come in packages

it is not possible
to make a choice and

exclude what you

do not want

so choose 

well

 
— leonard daranjo, Oct 06, 2008
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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Leonard

First I thought you were going for a nonet here - but syllables are off. Great message - especially like the opening line. Nice work. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Constipated people don't give a shit..."
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leonard daranjo

17 years 8 months ago

Thank You Jess

For bringing the anomaly to my notice. The Nonet was my intention but, for some reason, I thought it began with eight instead of nine syllables. I have made the correction by adding another nine syllable line. Thanks for reading and commenting. Leonard
Rett

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Choices are like buying a car

Sometimes you choose a good one, sometimes a lemon and it is hard to make lemonade without sugar. Well said Leonard. *chuckle* you did have an Octet? now it's a nonet. I liked it a lot. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Leonard

There is so much truth to this, Thanks for sharing! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

Logic well thought out ...

and followed up. I like. It occurs to me that among the possible extensions in meaning of "choices come in packages" might be "choices come with baggage." I'm not trying to be funny ... but I laugh anyway (tho' perhaps from nervousness). Thanx, Chuck

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