prayersbyPatty

Oct 18, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Moment Etched in Time

Granddaughter Sara
blue eyes pooling innocence
Buries face in soft fur

Hope crawling closer
both oblivious to sound
silent harmony

Carpet the canvas
sunlight , rainbows add magic
peaceful moment shared

— prayersbyPatty, Oct 18, 2008

Critiques

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Great Images

I really liked this Patty! Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Rett

For stopping by and your kind comments. It came to me last night in a stolen glimpse. Patty

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Patty

This must be from the picture the baby and the dog you had up before. The picture is precious, and your poem is sweet

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Linda

Thanks for stopping by. It was a good night for me, I know those moments are the best. Glad you enjoyed. Patty

rider68

17 years 7 months ago

A Beautiful moment

Hi Patty, This is a Beautiful moment caught and written down, Best regards. peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Peter,

Thanks for stopping by to read I really appreciate it. Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 7 months ago

Patty

Amazing how a moment can be etched forever in the mind. Nicely written Patty~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Jan for your comments

The words you wrote are the title of my poem. Thanks you, Patty

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Janice-

It sure was a moment I will never forget. When I am old, I will say... those were the days. Thanks for stopping in to read and commenting. Patty

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Yay Patty!!

Congrats on your first one! I don't know about you, but for me, there are few things that can exceed the comfort of a treasured pet. there have been quite a few times I've laid on the floor of the spare bedroom where plenty of sun hits, and just lie in the sunbeam with Jai curled up purring on my chest. And I think to myself "life just doesn't get very much better than this...." And yes, sunbeams instantaneously zap all motivation and energy from you - you can't cross one and not relax! :~D ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"It is better to be thought of a fool, than to open your mouth and remove all doubt..." - Mark Twain

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Jess

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. It seems when we lay on the floor, the animals know we are fair game. First curious, then loving. your are right maybe I should use that for a title? Patty

leonard daranjo

17 years 7 months ago

Great Work Patty

I enjoyed the mellifluousness. Leonard

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Leonard

Thanks for taking the time to read. Yes it was a very treasured moment. Patty

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Mmm....

Not quite sold on the title.... will come back with suggestions as I think of them. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"It is better to be thought of a fool, than to open your mouth and remove all doubt..." - Mark Twain

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Jess K

You are correct the title is awful... went back in the comments and changed it to something Janice said. Like it much better.

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Moment in time

I went back and looked at your revision and the title is perfect. laying in a circle of sun is a wonderful image of your granddaughter and pet sleeping on the floor. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Thank for rechecking

The change I made were subtle, glad you re-visited appreciate it. Patty

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