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I would just change the 'u' to 'you'. I think most teenaged girls can relate to this at one point in their life or another. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When there's no good answers, and no new questions. Another personal disaster, there's nowhere to go but down..." - Gin Blossoms

You say I’m never afraid But my fear carries my life You say I’m very pretty But ugliness is all I see You say I’m all together But you don’t see me picking up the pieces hope you don't mind. I thought these changes would make the rhyme and rhyme flow a little better. You are a very good writer and it shows in your work. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Great work Tess, so much said in so few lines, Bravo. M