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asylum

i am in an asylum in the middle of the town
where my life is an acid trip that will never let me down

i remeber the first time i came to this place
and when i do this fear is seen on my face

i knew i belonged here was'nt that hard to see
but that doesnt change how i want to set free

whats hard is the telling between mind and reality
but fear is the worst when they show brutality

but now i just live here, and that is hard to face
when you have to lie and show you dont belong in this place
— Tessadiana, Oct 30, 2008

Critiques

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zarul

17 years 7 months ago

hi diana

goos and nice poem. the flow is very smooth, adn i love it ZARUL
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Tessadiana

17 years 7 months ago

hey

hey zarul im glad u liked my poem and i beleive if u liked this one u might like down the black cat hole my other poem thanks for taking the time Tessadiana<3
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 7 months ago

asylum

tessadiana, Please capitalize all your i's [I] wasn't doesn't don't want to set free [want to be set free] Just a few suggestions here my friend~ ~~~~~~~~~~~Wanda Sykes For President~~~~~~~~
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Tess,

this is a good write, even in the known we can still feel like outsiders. But I agree with Janice, the the words make you stumble as your reading, otherwise I see your point. thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

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