how can i ask for more?

The earths core is a hot place lol Tess, really though, I think this is an awesome start. It's like a free write that needs a bit of taming. First make sure it is all you wish to express. Second go about the work of making it ito stanzas. Finally look for lines you can make shorter without removing any of your original feeling. Please be sure to send me the link to this in a PM as I might overlook it in my mail. (gonna give ya some stars for the prewrite) Great beginning and good luck, Mark Man thinks this.