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you are my everything

You are my air
I need you

You are my fire
u keep me warm

You are my water
you keep me content

You are my earth
always ready for me to lean on you

You are my sight ,taste. Hearing, speech and sent
I need you for everything

You are my love
you heal me

You are my tree
you shade me

You are my quilt
you hold me

You are my peace
you stop me

You are my ambition
you encourage me

You are my heart
you do your job so well

You are my candle
.so strong but can be blown out

You are my smile
every one comments on how great you are

You are my legs
so loyal when told to take me some wear

You are my hope
without you I would crawl into a hole and die

You are my salt
can't live without you

You are my love

You are my everything
— Tessadiana, Nov 09, 2008

Critiques

themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Tess...

I read your directions for the comments... but the repetitive "You are" (in my opinion) detracts from this write of yours... Maybe if it were a bit shorter ... I do love your list of everythings... as I'm sure whoever this was written for does as well... and everyone comets on how great you are... was that supposed to be comments? Richard

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