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A VIOLATION- REVISED

A Violation Sweet and gentle and kind Heart Asleep in Love’s tender hold Innocence and Purity Unable yet to see Slowly coming near to you An obscenity Hidden behind tender tears A warm touch And Words that seem to care Unaware A heart black as coal Lurks waiting To violate  your soul 
— Geremia, Nov 12, 2008

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Lonnie

17 years 7 months ago

Hey, Longo!

Nicely written piece! The format through me off a bit, but once I got used to it, all was fine! Good job!
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Jasmine

17 years 7 months ago

Sad, yet so beautiful!!!!

Your writing amazes me...while I am crying at the words...the poetry shines... absolutely awesome!!!!! Jaz

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