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Notso
Nov 13, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Those Eyes


Those Eyes

There's those eyes again
I can feel them on my back
Everytime I turn to see
In the shadows all is black

Watching me constantly
see all the things I do
searching for something
or some type of clue

My thoughts attack me
with no warning it seems
They hit me when I'm at play
rather than in my dreams

I know who's eyes they are
because  I remember what they see
I am hardest on myself
Those Eyes belong to me

Notso
— Notso, Nov 13, 2008
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Tink

17 years 7 months ago

very good

glad to see you finally made it here!!!!! i like this one. well done on the first post! any questions, ask, if i can't help, someone else can.
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Notso

17 years 7 months ago

reponse

Thank-you. It's a start. I'll put a new everyday if I can remember.
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Fareeda Moin

17 years 7 months ago

Those Eyes

Wow!!! An enchanting poem - very nicely worded. A great idea of your searching eyes pointed at you. Beautiful. -Fareeda
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Those Eyes

I love How you put these images to words so beautifully. My eyes attack me many times when everything is going good and I have nothing to complain about. Great first poem. Welcome to neopoet looking forward to reading more of your work. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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Tessadiana

17 years 7 months ago

very

very pretty Tessadiana<3 “black is nor darkness nor fear but the ignorant bliss we have all forgotten"
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 6 months ago

love this

not a thing to add too busy with the hairs on the back of my neck from being seen too well. a great read, gets across the conflict smoothly N

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