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Michael Landau
Dec 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Indian Rose

In my mind's eye
Your beauty unfurls
Your eyes shine
Like black pearls

Oh Indian rose
You mesmerize me
Your smile is so bright
I can't even see

What I can I say
To win your heart?
I stutter and stammer
But I can't even start

— Michael Landau, Dec 14, 2008
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Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 6 months ago

Hi Michael,

This is simple, clear and full of love and admiration for beauty. I like the way this gorgeous person leaves you speechless. Beauty is a highly formidable quality. Best wishes, Robert.
Nilmini

Nilmini

17 years 5 months ago

This is Wonderful, Michael

Again another wonderful piece of your work, Michael! The simplicity in expressing your admiration of her beauty and the word use are sooo perfect, I envy you. I truly wish that I'd write stuff like this one day! Cheers, Nilmini

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