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Geremia
Geremia
Dec 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

CONVERSATIONS

  CONVERSATIONS Just passed by to say "hello"It’s been a while You know.I miss your smileAnd your tender waysWe talked a lot thenWhen you were wellTellMeAre you doing okayAndIs there something I can doFor you.I’m so sorry I haven’t been aroundI’m in a mess and kind of lost my groundBut you are always nearNever far Mamma And Even though your gone You are in my heart and soul I see  you in meIn every move I makeAnd Every step I take.
— Geremia, Dec 14, 2008

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Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 6 months ago

Hi Longo,

I liked this because it's clear and simple. The only bit I'm not sure about is the ending because it's taken from a pop song. Best wishes, Robert.
Geremia

Geremia

17 years 6 months ago

Consrsations

J.B. Longo-Geremia Yes, I see that ending now from STING, BUT that was a coincidence-- you see my mom died of Parkinsons and 2 years after I was diagnosed with the disease-- and I DO see myself in every move I m ake and every -- painful-- step I take. Had nnothing to do with the song, but now see it. I gu9ess great minds think alike, no? :) Thans ' joe
Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 6 months ago

Parkinson's.

Sorry, I didn't realize there were such harsh circumstances behind this poem. The ending is fine in the light of your difficult situation. Sorry about your mother and I wish you the best in your fight against Parkinson's. Best wishes for Christmas too, Robert.
Geremia

Geremia

17 years 6 months ago

Conversations

J.B. Longo-Geremia No need to be sorry. Robert. I am glad you brought that to my attention. I a ppreciate all you comments. my friend/ :) joe
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Stella

17 years 6 months ago

I think this is very moving

I think this is very moving Longo, and honest. It saddens me a little.. Your structure works really well for this poem. All the best, ~Stella
Geremia

Geremia

17 years 6 months ago

Conversations

J.B. Longo-Geremia Thank you, Stella [ Stella in Italian means "star", but i guess you knew that :) ] joe
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Stella

17 years 6 months ago

I’m not sure whether I

I'm not sure whether I shine as brightly : ) but it's nice nonetheless. I really hope you're doing okay Joe! Still moved by your words. ~ Stella
Geremia

Geremia

17 years 6 months ago

Stella

J.B. Longo-Geremia I am doing "ok." Thanks, my friend, Grazie mille !! Joe And yes you DO shine as brightly-- I see it in your heart. After all, I AM part gypsy, you know. :)
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Stella

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks for your kind words

Thanks for your kind words Joe! ..part gypsy.. that sounds intriguing : ) ~Stella
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

How we feel the presence of your mother in this poem

Ann of Norway This has a flow I, love its flow and then there is the content, true to yourself close to yourself, real yet not, how we feel the presence of your mother in this poem as if we should see her the next minute commenting on your piece, I know she liked it and would be proud of her Joe-Guiseppe. Love Annuccia

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