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who am I? Slight revisions...

damn.
pitstop... doorstop...
pregame, endgame,
don't ya get tired of all these homegames?
winners and losers
ragamuffins and boozers
12-step-programs, pogams,
and stations-of-the-cross, crossing the
walls around Palestine, Israel mourns
for the dead, but can't see the living,
and it's a crying shame,
who's to blame?
nonduality and plurality fly out the window
with the hand that rocks the cradle
and the finger
that pushed the buttons
makes the call on the red Presidential phone,
if we just could, once and for all,
just
leave it all alone..

it must have been good in the beginning
way up there the air is still fresh and clean,
even if the streets are filled with mean,
we were all born of a  barren mother,
and somewhere the rock-a-bye-cradle
lullaby got stuck
in the middle of the road, there were no
detours no signposts ahead in Rod Serling's
voice, we all live on a yellow submarine
in a violent time zone,
did we ever have a choice?
in the deep blue yonder?
while some of us were kissing Santa under the mistletoe,
desperate housewives screwed the soldiers of fortune
who sucked the bones dry of all the lepers of Calcutta
and Molokai,
the businessmen are not-so-fat cats in the city, Wallstreet
is the new Isle of the Dead,
the monkey's paw turns the cosmic wheel,
and it's all coming apart again for the last time
I have heard, no I to ponder, not a creature will be stirring,
not even a mouse.


— Kailashana, Dec 28, 2008

Critiques

theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 5 months ago

and...

. .. ... .... ..... ...... ....... ........ ......... .......... i think i love you... at least i love this piece!!! you rocked this one girl! perfect pace and killer message! i bet you give an awesome performance! just so you know...loved it!!! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 5 months ago

((((((Emarie))))) thanks…

((((((Emarie))))) thanks... it was one of those consciousness flowy thingy things... tis some crazy times.. Hope you and your beautiful kids had a nice Xmas... I know times are difficult for most of us... Give them all an extra hug from me. ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 5 months ago

Anna...

written as if it surged from within... the seer... the poet... the world. much love to you Anna themoonman
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 5 months ago

…and to you Moonman…

...and to you Moonman... that IS what IT is all about, eh? Hugs.. ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 5 months ago

hehehehe. the more

hehehehe. the more revisions the less stars...? weird. or were the 5 stars a mistake in the first place.. yeah, I do notice 'em..after all, poets have egos, ya know. ;-) ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Anna

Quite a good one actually. Loved the references to the movies and the TV shows and the way you made the m work together. If only there was a Magic Carpet Ride to a button that would give us all peace on earth.5/5 Respectfully, Rett: "I didn't do it! I'm innocent! Uh, what was the question again mama?" Rett

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