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wise oak tree

wise oak tree show me the way
i do not seek my destiny
and can not do it today

wondrous field mouse talk to me please
tell me your worries
set mine at ease

peaceful Lily i look to you know
be my hearts whim or
just let be forced to bow



— Tessadiana, Jan 08, 2009

Critiques

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prettyprincess

17 years 5 months ago

i liked it especially the

i liked it especially the first section it riminds me of something out of a movie i saw when i was little the tress are old theyve seen more experinced more life lol :)
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Lonnie

17 years 5 months ago

Good job, Tessa!

Couple of typos but It is a very readable poem! Makes one feel relaxed and at peace with Nature!

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