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sweet valentine

Richie ,he was beautiful
a gentle flower
a sudden rain
in my heart
he cared
left a mark on me
that cant be erased
and when i think of him
my heart beats real hard
and my breath escapes me
and it feels like i ate really spicy chips
so i look fro him sometimes
to feel this always
i will love
and once we touched
i was giving him my pencil
but electricity shot through me at a speed
faster than anything in this world
and i cant believe he cant be mine
he cant be mine
but he is my sweet valentine
— Tessadiana, Jan 09, 2009

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Tessadiana

17 years 5 months ago

thanks alot

seems that everyone assumes that when you write its how you feel that is true most of the times but i dont remember having an acid trip or bein a skitso -path aaww i guess this is an exeption and i do have a crush all well Tessadiana<3 "love is so many things but one of them is you"

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