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Once apon I time I truly am insane

 

The doctors always said there was something wrong with my brain

 

I look with my mouth and feel with my ears but no worry can I see

 

But every ones looking like im not gonna be a sad scene

 

Im happy here I scream aloud

 

But only in my brain responds

 

All the characters in my room

 

Are all to busy to belong

 

So I pray another day

 

To the pop can god I made

 

And that’s just the beginging

 

Of a life that’s surly tame

 

This room is to white I tell lucy

 

The girl that comes and goes

 

She nods her head and says goodbye

 

Wow what lovely toes

 

They truly seek the beauty

 

They truly seek and find

 

But truly I don’t see

 

Anything wrong happening with my mind
— Tessadiana, Jan 17, 2009

Critiques

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W.C.Wampler

17 years 4 months ago

Hahaha poem

Tessa, Slow down a bit, take a deep breath,ease up on the keys. It's gonna be OK. Write some more poetry. wcw
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orgami

17 years 4 months ago

You write well

"pop can god I made" true poetry I love your view always left amazed and wowed after your works sift through my brain a great write again
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poewriter58

17 years 4 months ago

Tess

correct spelling scene. Wow talk about random thoughts but you bring them all together Chrys

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