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almost murderer ,my first kill, and my love all in one

blood
seeking down
singing to my heart
loving in my head

blood seeking from my almost murderer
my love sometimes
my enemy some days
once dancing
then fighting
then done

and nothing is done
and nothing but your life is gone
and that knife i used against you
stabbed into my heart
too

and i kiss
your dead face
and cry
on your dead cheek

cause now
your not my almost murderer
right now my love is dead


sleep now my lovely
into life you dont belong
and the blood dripping on the floor
is both our love songs
— Tessadiana, Jan 21, 2009

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 4 months ago

Strong strong allegory (I

Strong strong allegory (I hope) and totally relate. Have torn each other to pieces in past love affairs This is the sort of brave, gutsy poetry we need here, not Hallmark sentimentality cheers, Jess

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