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Shadowteller
Jan 26, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Loss

I gave her a kiss

A kiss good-bye

Her spirit left

And went to the sky

 

Pale and white

Her body was so

Leaving me this

Deep, dark, black hole

 

Emptiness seeped

And crept in me

Hoping that death

Would also pick me

 

Wondering when

And wondering why

As I fell…

And started to cry


— Shadowteller, Jan 26, 2009

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Pencilme

17 years 4 months ago

Yes

you captured the heart of "loss" bravo~take a bow1
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big-Alzer

17 years 4 months ago

hey there

hey chris love your new work. this is a beautiful, but sad picture of loss,love the way it begins, and ends. blessings Alzer.
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 4 months ago

Loss

my friend This is so tender heart wrenching even. Oh the sadness of this picture. I have been in this place six times now and I am the survivor, Why I do not know but you my friend have reached that special place that remains with you forever. Electricblue

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