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seperation

the bleakness is a bomb
the darkness is hymn
the service went too long
my feet have become numb
my brain box has come dumb
have we succumb?
— goatman, Feb 09, 2009

Critiques

Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

ha..I love this gem

I just pass out but that's me. How can I be catholic if I succumbed at every ritual? good write goatman, Mark "Do not ask me about poetry, I am just a poet"
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 3 months ago

yes

if you're sitting impotent and silently bitching, waiting, then yes, you have succumb. good 'desolate' imagery, such boredom you had! and we all write about ourselves, don't we? like your stuff

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