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May We Smile

 Let the buds of our smile flower again

And awake the enchanting nights

That played symphony in our soul’s domain

Till the flame of my charming memory ignites

 

Let the past bitterness drift in the sea of oblivion

Let the heart’s anguish and pain dilute

In the raindrops from eyes, in the flowing diluvian

And the mission of love elegantly execute

 

Till when devils of differences to rule our minds

Be a David and slay the Goliath of solitude

Plant the rose that fragrance of love unwinds

Tread the path leading soul to valley of vicissitude

 

Sparkling fountain of bliss waits to immerse

Our bodies and soul deserve the fragrance

And melody that spring of life intersperse

Experience the love’s grace and elegance

 

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— Mohammad Yamin Iraqi, Feb 19, 2009

Critiques

R

rahbar

17 years 3 months ago

A great message.

Hello Brther Yamin...this poem of yours seems to have come from a very troubled heart...which constantly worries about the present affairs of the world and mankind...every line is bathed in love and compassion...a very touching work indeed. Rahbar.
MI

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 3 months ago

Rahbar

Thanks for your educated comments on my poem. You have gone deep beyond the surface meaning of the words and explored the depths of meaning. How can I thank you brother. Neopoet doesnot seem to be same as before. Memmbers seem to be self satisfied and donot bother to comment on the works of others. Even your friends fall into this category. This is not a likable situation and is detrimental to the cause of poetry. May be my voice reaches my friends. Please read and comment on poems posted. -Mohammad
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 3 months ago

Mohammad

It seems to me that you have been doing a lot of reflecting, and your soul is growing in love and maturity. Again I notice the reference to the rose in your poetry, it must be a favorite of yours, as it is mine. I am your friend, and I hear your voice. Sincerely, Linda
MI

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 3 months ago

Linda

Indeed! I have been doing reflecting, soul searching and soul cleansing. I love roses and am pleased to know you love them too. You honor me by saying 'I hear your voice. I thank you from the bottom of my heart. Your sincere friend, Mohammad A Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean: My verses are attired in the robes of gold Mysteries of rhythm my thoughts unfold Words take the shape of my charming beloved It's the grace of my voice, lo and behold!
MI

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 1 month ago

Ann Harvey

Thank you Ann for your encouraging comments. I am so pleased you read my poem and cared to comment on it. Extremely kind of you. After all we belong to the same continent and share same feelings, It is said that birds of same feather flock together. God Bless You. -Mohammad

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