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like rain

i hold out my hand
it is raining
my anguished heart,

You
are a returning thought
on Hummingbird wings,
carressing me,
drenching me
with golden light,

i feel Your presence, My Love,
we touch like rain on skin.





— Kailashana, Mar 08, 2009

Critiques

themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Anna...

I feel your desire within... I love the rain, well, at least on a warm day anyway... hope all is well... Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 3 months ago

((((((((Moonman))))))))Whethe

((((((((Moonman)))))))) Whether or not all is well is not the question, however thank you for reading and asking the question. ;-) Smoke gets in your I's life is a well from which we drink, intoxicated we fly like words off paper little clouds, puffs of smoke.. ~Anna "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
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zarul

17 years 3 months ago

hi

A very nice poem from u. this is short yet with a meaning of a sonnet. beautiful. nt commenting much

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