I Can’t Find My Body (Rated PG)

Good to read from you again,and a very good and funny one at that,but you know your 'body is not detachable,so I dont know where you are coming from.Lol.

One is never too old to father and incubate the extension add-on of our great DNA I have made my reproduction and she is a wild-child a regular Chip-of-the-blok! thank god not a Spitting Image (no she doesnt look like my best freind either!!!!) She looks like Both the Mother and I (I still remember that sultry afternoon labour day Holiday or something The wall of mirrors the great bed the soft air moving through the screen of the raised windows Oh I need to put a new lightbulb in the lamp I see spiderwebs in the corner of the ceiling Is that a grey hair in my beard..) oh just took a second to look at myself well back to 2009 from 1990 Just ribbin yo man The poem is great Im still chuckling over that whole weird comment thing going on in Craigs Poem Hes a good poet and funny when hes not even trying and Nina too You added it all together and here it is Extremely funny!! Fives Stars!!

So you had an out of Body experience, and to embody it in a witty write was good fun,Although I thought that the body of the poem could have been more up front and visible in the words, you seem to have bodily removed all traces of it in the opening Stanzas, still you are the one person that can boldly or should I say bodily go where none have gone before. The whole thing brought to mind a song that went like, I ain't got no body, and No body cares for me LA La Laughing out loud. Bet someone will put the spotlight on to see you , Yours Ian.T

I think your body and Kelsey's ass that she laughed off are in the same spot. I loved this write. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Just because you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one..." Doin' a March of Dimes walk 4/26 : http://www.marchforbabies.org/jnj7880

thanks a lot for the dedication! This is still as hilarious as it was the first time around! However, a closer look reveals some parts that might need work. At the risk of sounding like Jonathan: I do think you may want to reconsider your syllable count, thereby improving the flow of the piece. Also, please reconsider a few word choices to give it even more punch. A few suggestions: "I can’t find my body but I must reproduce, I forgot where I put it, which is no excuse. I need to find my body or my wife will be so mad, if I don’t find it by tonight, I’ll be in trouble bad. I promised her we’d start tonight, and I’d make everything alright. She wants to start a child, she tells me every day now I can’t find my body, who knows what she will say. I know it’s here somewhere because I stowed it away, but if it fails to show up, there’s gonna be hell to pay. Did I leave it in the bedroom? Perhaps I should go see. If I don´t find it soon, I think she will divorce me. Well, I don´t have to look no more, it’s been here all along. I just can’t seem to figure out why it’s wearing a thong. It seems there are no worries, she’s happy as can be, It seems it got tired of waiting and started without me." As always, these are just suggestions, and you can pick those you like and forget about those you didn't. Yours, ~Nina (who finally got tired of her tag and must now look for a new one)

now I can give you the full high five without being tempted to flatter you just because you flattered me with your dedication ;) Yours, ~Nina (who has run out of clever tags because she feels like her last one didn't agree with everyone)

You made me smile, I have not the comments here that prompted the poem so am not sure of the whole meaning but I liked this very much, I can see you running about the house trying to find what's already there this is great fun. The only line that I 'stusset' on was this one? Rhythm-wise I mean. "If I don´t find it soon, I think she will divorce me." Respectfully yours Ann of Norway