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Blue_Halcyon
Blue_Halcyon
May 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Ravaged



The affliction comes,Seeping and poolingOn the surface of the skin;Blot it, try to wipe it away,Quickly,Attempting to absorb the acheThat eclipses pride.  For the Sphinx has been broughtLow;Wings clipped, claws dulled,Spirit trampled by havoc and desolation.

As might is blown away,Like a dandelion seedFloating on Zephyr’s quiet breath.
— Blue_Halcyon, May 04, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, USA

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Rumi, Kahlil Gibran, Edgar Allen Poe, Lewis Carrol, Yeats, Bukowski, Langston Hughes, Johanne Wolfgang von Goethe, ect.

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

Ravaged !

Oh no, Julie has started an epidemic! Just kidding! I really thought it was about a pimple.[seeping and pooling on the surface of the skin] However,If you are in that frame of mind......you could be talking about us and the government which would indeed make it pornographic,if you get my drift.. Loved it Gee.
SG

sudeep ghosh

17 years 1 month ago

‘Attempting to absorb the

'Attempting to absorb the ache/That eclipses pride.'- sounds epigrammatic. Shows the impact of Gibran.
Mark

Mark

17 years ago

Have seen alot of these

But this is so smart and graceful for such a topic. Mark Trust is a secret that never comes home.
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iverhyck

17 years ago

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Oh! The end crowns all.

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