I Wonder Why.

Like breath
Like soul
In my body
You dwell

Blood like
In my veins
You flow

You,
like Oxygen
Dissolve
In my every cell

Like a mother's milk
Your love
Nourishes my little self

You,
Like faith
Strengthen
My inner

Like eyesight
In my eyes
Like a tear
You stay

Like Pashto*
The interpreter
Of my sweet thoughts

And like a pearl
Like a pearl
In the dark depths
Of a deep sea

Thus dwell you in me

And still

You understand my love not!

I wonder why

You know me not!

— Wafi, May 04, 2009

Critiques

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Wafi, really enjoyed this!!!

Wafi, really enjoyed this!!! Lovely. (Couple of typo's, in 3rd stanza, & 7th stanza, just on a quick read). Yay, Thanks. ~ Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Occasionally in life there are those moments of unutterable fulfilment which cannot be completely explained by those symbols called words. Their meanings can only be artic

Wafi

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Anni

Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the typo. Sincerely. Wafi

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Wafi...

I thought this was really good, it took me a couple of reads to get the flow... you could fix that by changing the delivery by the minutest bit... and only in a couple of the stanzas... You like oxygen.... You like oxygen... instead of causing the reader to think about a break, it is there with the line break... and again in stanza five... You faith like... You faith like... and stanza three... dissolved... is past tense, maybe dissolve would work better... and "each" in the next line, I thought may work better if it was "every" beautiful sentiments of the ever-confusing love thing... enjoyed the read... Richard

Wafi

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks A lot Richard, My Friend

Thanks a lot Richard, my friend, for taking the time to read and comment on this. I am so thankful to you for your useful suggestions. It really was not working well before you corrected it. So glad you enjoyed it. Sincerely, Wafi

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

I love the last lines

I love the last lines of this poem especially with their unusual pattern which adds something particular to the words, this poem is very enjoyable throughout too, very special Wafi well done. Strangely haunting. Yours Ann of Norway

Wafi

17 years 1 month ago

Oh Ann, My Sweet Friend

Oh Ann, my sweet friend, it is really a great pleasure to have your comment on my poems. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. So happy it could get your attention. Sincerely, Wafi

Wafi

17 years 1 month ago

Thank You So Much Janice

Thank you so much Janice, for reading and commenting. I appreciate your thoughts so much. So glad you liked it. Sincerely, Wafi

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