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Love her Gaze through the Rear view Mirror

She made me hold my breathe and gasp,
I hoped this feeling would always last ,
She made me want to dance and sing,
More for which  merryment brings.

I look for her features in strangers passing,
I ponder should I eat well or begin fasting,
Could I ache in heart to belly,
Will I stand firm, or wobble like jelly.

Can I seek affection anew,
Could I forget all about you,
May I move on from now to new.
Can I love another too.

May I be happy, never glum or sad,
Should I not worry saying good or bad,
Definitely I shall be ever elated
Dont overemphasize or be too creative.

Give some time to get over you,
Pray these feelings pass on through,
Let the ticking of a watch piece linger
Neither my affection grow dimmer.

Pluck up the courage, straigten up your back,
Get on with the here and now and be exact,
Pull up your socks and get back on the horse,
Dont get fat and over genrous with HP sauce.

Take up a new hobby join an Acamdemy,
Set your heart right on it be merry and free,
Foster the moment, and be light as a dove,
And the next mome the bliss of love.

Jump up for joy ring the bells,
Call out in a Football Stadium, reputation to hell,
Give up the routine, find spontainity thrice,
Justy live up the moment and roll on the dice.
— Mansel, May 10, 2009

Critiques

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Kyarain

17 years 1 month ago

Fantastic First post

"Can I seek affection anew, Could I forget all about you, May I move on from now to new. Can I love another too." This line spoke strongly to me, reminds what I've felt and thought and questioned recently. Thank you for writing something so true and easy to relate to. A little rough, perhaps its your style to write a little choppy (I know I frequently prefer to)... yet sublime use of language. Intensely intriguing and I look forward to your next posts. WELCOME TO NEOPOET!!!!!! Always here to listen, read, and review... Your new friend Kyarain

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