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I think it perfect as it is and love it Nina. Beautiful that's what, like the moon herself. Yours Ann of Norway

ME TOO!!!! Love it!!! Now where did I put my quiver? No not that one! Lovely & ingenious poem! ~A "No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment of punishment." Article 5 of the Universal Declaration of Human Rights.

it does seem a little unfinished. I wonder what you were either going to do with the stars or in the utter darkness created when they fell. Also, if Diana can bring down the stars from the abyss, why does she need mere mortal me to notice? (not a criticism, just a reflection). She seems a little vulnerable. Maybe that was intended.

I am not so moved by the position of the moon now, I just loved its kinky little shape and am now extra sad that I didn't take a copy while she was there in that phase of your creation. Sorry if my comment is now a little ass-ymetrical but its funny little shape in fact gave it a grace it hasn't got, that of strangeness mixed with the obvious; I had better not embroider more on this cloth of words as I have overdone it already? Not against you adding more to this evocative little work of art. I still miss that quirky eye-catching cheese rind...oh Nina you have got my mind going in a direction that excites me, enough to mention it here as I have not yet developed the idea, thank you for that too. Happy to see/hear you back with us again too!! Yours as aye Ann of Norway

Yes Nina, magic as expected :) no you don't miss do you? but I missed you! Had a look at your revisions, I like 'upside down' in both formats, the first echoes the cresent moon beautifully and the second gives the upside down itself added power, depends which image you want to emphasise I suppose. really loved it and would happily read more, although it does stand wonderfully as it is! well, i'm not much help am I? lol but I am jubilant at your return :) much love b xx

Interesting use of the visuals, and especially liked the closing lines of the poem. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd

it doesnt stumble just goes for the lyrical facts and if it werent for the damned clouds and cool nights one would be out there (I was one) looking up at the shapes of the heavenly bodies are we worthy mice even on the face of this great home?? I like your writing very much though I may not have commented lately I move about and settle back again in revolutions but this once charmed me sweetly so! it did! it did.....

Nina I LOVE this it is so beautiful, just divine. May I offer one little weeny suggestion (no probs if you ignore at all)... When I read the line "I turn into..." I thought for a moment it was a directional expression, I wonder if it would sound better as "I become Diana"? Lovely write Nina xxx~ Anni ~~~ "Love has nothing to do with what you are expecting to get, it's what you are expected to give -- which is everything." -Anon

The intriguing placement of e d i d s o p w u n brings me special pleasure ... and a smile. Thanx, Chuck

I am sorry I did not come to this sooner. the end and beginning are so poetic, so... NinaDragonFire&Flames. I feel that the sudden picture in the poem disturbs the magic. but I see that others enjoyed it greatly, so I will count that as my personal taste. as for the rest, ahhh, so much beauty and strength. I love how you combine fragility with strong forces. I am looking forward to more of your new poetry. I sense a change in style... very exciting! your Proprietress

And say ( I am the goddess Diana, the solitary hunter, the virgin sorceress, ) ? ............................ Was it that night you saw them falling? Yours Nina from Ann of Norway

But this is coming from complete noob darby cain

Cant believe I Missed this Nina ... I LOVED IT !!!! ... Awesom write !! speachless to be honest ... Much love Jayne x

When a poem feels =unfinished- it's only because the reader has to fill in the missing details. That's what makes a good poem, great! Love, Anna "You begin saving the world by saving one person at a time; all else is grandiose romanticism or politics." Charles Bukowski

I love it and can just see you floating upside down in the firmament joining the godesses and gods in their journeys across the sky, I shall look out for you next time I have a telescope, you will end-up there among the stars. I am still fond of the asymmetrical odd little star cluster, but this looks good as it is here, I like the asymmetrical symmetry of things. My admiration for your new role and good wishes to it bringing you great happiness. Love from Ann of Norway

Enchanted words perfectly strung together to make olde time magick and pluck the strings of my heart! B E A U T I F U L! Always, Cat

It is perfect as is Nina ... wish I could vote twice to be honest for this deserves it .... Much love Jayne x x

Lovely, as I first felt it was, nice excuse to reread though xxx~ Anni ~~~ "I feel no need for any other faith than my faith in the kindness of human beings. I am so absorbed in the wonder of earth and the life upon it that I cannot think of heaven and angels." Pearl S. Buck:

This opening is just so beautiful Nina. i love the first two lines the most. ''A crescent moon, bleeding its soft light into the crimson sky A gust of wind, directionless, tossing a handful of invisibility'' Then the upside down thing you've down like the faling stars, its great. imagantive. vicki x

Are you playing with the I Ching letting this, your moon struck-ness tumble the sticks onto the ground to divine the divine goddess? Each time becoming wiser or not? Or as the people in Telemark say the 'osteskalk' cheese rind. How many phases of this moon will there be and does it ever eclipse? "Watching the full moon a small hungry boy forgets to eat his supper."......................Basho We will all become moonstruck dear Nina, love from Ann of Norway

descriptive. I need to be more descriptive like this. Thanks Ink Dragon. huey

still loving it Nina, and yes, there is a diana in all of us ; ) xxx