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The Cry in the Corridor

Tonight, I can't sleep
First nights in new places are Insomnia's best friend
Big houses make a lot of noise
Creeks and thumps
It's scary, the things that go bump in the night
Wind Whistles through the hall
The corridors cry
Or is that just me?

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In my hosted chat the other night, the topic was "Blocking out Writer's Block: Excersises to inspire creativity". The excersise was "Find a book WITH CHAPTER TITLES. Turn to chapter 5. Use the chapter title as the title for your poem." The book I used was "The Secret Garden", and the chapter title was "The Cry in the Corridor". This was the result. Enjoy!

— ginnydragon54, May 23, 2009

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Rett

Rett

17 years ago

Stephanie.

Nicely written, a tad choppy and one problem with spelling. Creeks(Creaks) and thumps. Other than that the description works, but could read smoother. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
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Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Hey Steph

Great use of the title of the chapter. Like a creepy hallway in the middle of the night, great little poem. I think you used the crying corridor theme well. I like how you ended with "Or is that just me?" makes your reader wonder what is in the corridor. Good job. Peace n Love Katie
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poewriter58

17 years ago

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Hey where is the rest lol I was hoping to see more of this perhaps you would consider extending it Chrys
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Tink

17 years ago

ginny

this, to me, is a great start, but i would love to see you expand on this. the idea/exercise to help with writer's block is a good one. this poem was picked to be read and discussed during my chat room tuesday night. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink

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