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paul
paul
May 24, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Heart's Survival

 I give on to you this heart Hoping you will cherish it Wishing you will keep it near Please protect it from This cold and dark world If you see it shed a tear Wipe its weary eyes Hide it from the cruelty If it seems a bit lonely Offer it your warm arms Whatever you do keep it Safe from the sickness That only time can heal Please don’t let it brake For it has seen how Betrayal can bring The coldest of winters How loneliness slowly Brings a man to his knees The way ones pride Can slowly destroy The strongest of men I ask of you to keep it strong For its sick of being weak Friend promise me on thing That you will not break this heart  
— paul, May 24, 2009

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Region, Country: New York, USA

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Yaaaaaaaaaaay Paul!!!

Another great poem from our beloved Zeus. Has a genuine feel of vulnerability that gives it a human feel. A beautiful write, Paul, as always, aside from a few typos I spotted (brake=break, on=one) Otherwise it's awesome. Keep writing, greek boy. Peace n Love Katie
Rett

Rett

17 years ago

Paul very good

This one is asking a lot, but a lot is expected of you and in turn you ask a lot of the other. Well done, well said. A couple of small errors that I offer corrections fore below. Other than that this is very good. On that note, I would also like to see you write something upbeat or even humorous. Break it up a bit. Have the reader guessing what you will write next. *G* Please don’t let it brake (break) Friend promise me on(one) thing Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
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Phx4ever

15 years 11 months ago

OUCH

tenderly heartbreaking ...would never want to hurt you.

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