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Your Performance

To the sound of applause
You enter the well lit stage
As you take a deep breath
The crowd screams your name
As your words pour themselves
Into the hearts of so many
 Tears fall from your eyes
 For the excitement is painted
 On the faces of the multitudes
As your performance slowly ends
 So many ask you to continue
 Time becomes less significant
 As your words become vaccines
  To the demons of a raging pain
  Like the sound of Apollo’s Lyre
 You leave your listeners in awe
  Their hearts become a canvas 
  Which you fill with masterpieces
  All you did was listen to your heart
— paul, May 25, 2009

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Region, Country: New York, USA

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years ago

So glad....

So glad that I could be the first to comment on your newest. Paul, you have been hiding your light under the basket,[as one of my teachers used to say]. Awesome! I couldn't have said it better myself. I think that this is what every artist and poet strives for and so few can achieve. You however,are succinct and beautiful at the same time. congrats on an awesome piece. Gee
Tonya

Tonya

17 years ago

grrrrrrrrrrrrrr... where the heck did my comment go???

dang it! well... let me see if i can remember what i said! lol I beleive a great performer has the ability to wow us with their art.. orator, singer, actor. I have seen some really wonderful performances that i would have liked the performer to just go on and on entertaining, touching with the words or voice.. lovely poem Paul. So many feel and think wonderful things and don't have the ability to share it, so when someone does, it is really special! I think you have grown a lot as a poet. Excellent poem Paul! Always, Tonya
Rett

Rett

17 years ago

Paul

This one speaks volumes. Sometimes the performance say what we have in our hearts. The other person just has the ability to listen and formulate the feelings into words and thus share ir for them. You have accomplished this with this poem. Well done sir. Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years ago

Your Performance

Paul,This one drew me in for I love music, and I loved the last line ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Yaaaaaaaaaay paul

Another splendid write, definately one of your best, greek boy. Love the imagery of some dramatic performance, very stunning. The last line is awesome, a beautiful poem, paul. Peace N Love Katie
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

Yayyyyyy, Zeus!

Isn't it cool to have the entire audience enraptured as you give your speech, play your song, or whatever you do for them?? Every eye and ear turned your way. Outstanding job bringing that sentiment to life. ----------------------------------------- "Until that ‘morrow render unto me That which is mine my stipend well deserved The fairest flower of your progeny Your sons, your daughters your hopes and your dreams The cruel consequence of your conceit" - Steve Earle
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orgami

17 years ago

well composed young man and spoken A Poets voice

this is a most powerful and mature peice Paul excellent in its delivery and quiet feel as the others say It is a great honour to see you growing here and to read your shared poems Excellent Paul!!
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Tink

17 years ago

This is a good one paul

I liked the way you captured the presence of being on stage and seeing into those who have gathered to see the performer there. well done Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
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Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Paul,

really, really great one here. My only question: Why didn't you split it into stanzas? I'm not sure whether I like that. One the one hand, it mirrors the breathlessness of a rock concert, which goes well with your subject, on the other hand, it would be easier to read for us if it didn't all come in one chunk. Also, you would be able to enhance and/or stress some lines by adding a few breaks. Yours, ~Nina

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