Wafi

May 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Pitcher Of My Heart

God Himself
With His sacred
And beautiful hands
From the stream of your love
Filled the empty pitcher
Of my heart

And you broke it...

Then He
Collected
The broken pieces
To Himself
And with His artistic
And beautiful fingers
From the mud
Of His love
He made
My heart's pitcher
Again...
Filled it
From the stream
Of His love
And said;
"Worry not dear!
For never will I
Break this pitcher."

And life started
To dance
In my dead veins...

— Wafi, May 28, 2009

Critiques

Race_9togo

17 years ago

Wafi

Nothing wrong with the title at all. Nothing wrong with the rest of the poem either. A beautiful piece, so poignant and full of love's transcendence. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Wafi

17 years ago

Thank You So Much Jim

Thank you so much Jim, my friend, for reading and commenting. This piece of mine so dear to me. So glad it got your attention. Sincerely, Wafi

Arrow

17 years ago

*These lines don’t read

*These lines don't read quite right: Then Himself He collected The broken pieces. Maybe: Then He, Himself/collected the broken pieces or Then He collected/the broken pieces/to Himself. In any case, I think He needs to come before Himself. *“Wafi dear, Worry not! For never will I Break this pitcher” I would revise here to eliminate your name so this reads more universally. Many people can relate to this. I agree with Jim about the beauty of this poem. It's a merciful epiphany about love or, I should say, Love.

Wafi

17 years ago

Thanks A Lot Arrow

Thanks a lot Arrow, for reading and commenting and yeah for the great suggestions that you always bless me with. I appreciate your thoughts so much. always... Sincerely, Wafi

prayersbyPatty

17 years ago

Love it

ah.... yes... thats the truth

Wafi

17 years ago

Oh Thanks Patty

Oh thanks Patty, what a wonderful comment! Glad it got your attention :) Sincerely, Wafi

Wafi

17 years ago

Thanks A Lot Janice

Thanks a lot Janice. How are you feeling now? Glad to see you back. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs, All vanish with love" ~Afzal Shauq~

mikey

17 years ago

I love this poem. It’s

I love this poem. It's from the heart and i can tell that you're someone who has loved and lost.

Wafi

17 years ago

Thank You So Much

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. You are very true my friend. Welcome to neopoet. Hope you will enjoy the company of the poets here. Looking forward to reading your work. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Wafi

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks You So Much

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your thoughts so much. Glad you liked and commented on it. I am male. Peace be unto you. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

loved

16 years ago

Exquisite pitcher

...made by the lovable hands of God Shall forever remain full Of indelible ink... As words of real love flow And from your own ink Many more shall blow LOVED

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