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barbsdad2003
Jun 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

early night




early
night

ghost moon lights through/past
gossamer, standing-still clouds;
winds chase around trees
— barbsdad2003, Jun 02, 2009

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barbsdad2003

17 years ago

I was about to make ...

my peace with bedtime when I glanced out the open bedroom door ... looking up. The winds rushed hither and yon. I could make out the night-darkened trees easily, their branches sweeping air. But the looking up showed a full moon that shone misty through cloud cover so diaphanous that it made the orb appear to an extent like a camera shot taken out of focus. The contrast between the quiet heavens/the winds chasing one another at ground level was, yes, striking. And I tried to capture at least a sense of it in the brief words permitted by haiku. Thanx, Chuck
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

You make me jealous lol ...

I havent tried haiku yet and you do it and make it look effortless always a pleasure to read your words ... BUT this one is my favourite so far ... loved the myriad of images I received in such a few words ... WOW ... Love and Light Jayne x
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barbsdad2003

17 years ago

Hey!

Writing haikus's fun. I so enjoy being handcuffed/restricted/held in check to so few syllables to paint a scene, make a point, whatever ... Thanx much, Chuck
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years ago

early night

Chuck, ~~My vote tells you what I thought of this one~~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

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