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A Stallion's Song

 A Stallion’s Song 



Wet, I paw the filmy shadows

of the sac I was born in

It breaks and the sun 

shatters my safety,

then warms me 

with old memories.

My mother bends 

to smell my head and mane

I hear the sound of wind

in her whisper

and struggle to stand

for the sake of the promise

in her eyes.

Tender and powerful

she shows me who I will be



And now I gallop

Brilliantly I take on

this summer’s day

Whatever I see I become:

these fields of flowers

this fragrant grass

this earth, this sun

this boundless sky



Destiny I've none

but to gallop the wind

in the bliss of it

in all this joy

of wind and sun and self

 


— Celadon, Jun 05, 2009

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Celadon

16 years 12 months ago

CeladonHi Blanca, thank you

Celadon Hi Blanca, thank you so much for your comments! I can't say I'm rider, but for once when I took my life into my hands with a beautiful black horse who gave me the ride of my life, knowing full well I was a newbie.I remember almost nothing of the passing scenery! But here's a gorgeous YouTube of Lorenzo the Flying Horseman who has an amazing relationship with the wild horses of Camargue. The gods have returned to the earth!! http://www.youtube.com/watch?gl=JP&hl=ja&v=YXpxpKTnUr8&feature=related luv, Marion

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