Wafi

Jun 05, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Longing...

We--
A tired tear
Fallen from
Love's eye
Divided
In two...
Half me,
Half you
Both
Longing
For union...

— Wafi, Jun 05, 2009

Critiques

faerybeki

17 years ago

Wafi, this is a great little

Wafi, this is a great little poem, 'a tired tear, fallen from love's eye', wonderful line, I love it. And Unity? isn't it what we all struggle for, strive for? I'm starting to think it comes from being whole and not half, we perhaps need to find completion in ourselves and not, maybe, in the arms of another? Just my thoughts Wafi, which your poetry so often provokes in me, thank you, much love b xx

Wafi

17 years ago

Manena Beki

Manena Beki, for your thought provoking comment :) I appreciate your wise thougts so much. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

faerybeki

17 years ago

Happy to reciprocate in the

Happy to reciprocate in the thought provoking Wafi but lmao at wise :) just my thoughts, no wiser than anyone else's. Do like this poem Wafi, hope the exams went well? much love b x

Wafi

17 years ago

Manena Beki

Manena Beki, glad you liked it. Yeah all ended well, except the "Financial Management" paper. Was a bit tough. Seems I may get a C in it. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Janice Pearce

17 years ago

Longing

A personal poem from the heart Wafi? Nicely done~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Wafi

17 years ago

Thank You So Much Janice

Thank you so much Janice, for stopping by. I appreciate your comments a lot. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Hi Wafi,

a bitterweet little write. The image of the tired tear falling from love's eye intrigued me. Yours, ~Nina

Wafi

17 years ago

Thanks A Lot Nina

Thanks a lot Nina. I appreciate your comments very much. My pleasure you liked it. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Wafi

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks A Lot Janice.

Thanks a lot Janice, for taking the time to read and comment. So glad you like it. Hope you are doing well. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Wafi

16 years 11 months ago

Thank You Janice

Thank you Janice, the baby in the picture is my nephew(my sister's son), 5 months old. His name is Musawir. We all love him so much. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Wafi

Beautiful words, beautifully written. Your true to heart, love it. Lyz XX

Wafi

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks A Lot, Lyz

Thanks a lot, Lyz, for the lovely comment. So thankful to you for reading and commenting on it. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

loved

16 years 1 month ago

a tired tear

A tired tear Can tear What it can do apart From tear It obviously can Mend And Two loving hearts repair. The kiss of the tear, Can make two hearts, Love one another Though poles apart LOVED

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